I got the beginning of the sequel reworked last night. I’m not sure if I like it, but it does seem to speed things along. I cut about 400 words anyway.
The problem is that the tone is slightly different. I’m going to need another pass at the whole piece to see if I can wrangle some coherence. Adjusting the subplots will help, too. Right now everybody feels like they’re on a different page.
Also, don’t forget it’s Tuesday! That means a new web comic!